One Shot Film Review: First Edit

After looking back at the footage we commented on lots of errors within the dialog, camera position and positioning of the characters.

The main areas of concern:

The camera position could be improved, as their were areas that had no significance and because they the in the frame the action was significant. Areas of main concern were the headrests and excessive dark areas.
The conclusion; Remove headrest and zoom in slightly or maybe convert to widescreen?

The old woman was too far to the left hand side of the shot and cuts away some of the action.
The conclusion; Designate an area on the road for the action to enable the camera to capture all events, maybe removing the mirror, although this removes some realism?

The old woman seems to appear from nowhere and is less prominent in the story.
Conclusion; Have the old woman walking towards the car from from a distance at the beginning of the shot as if she has no importance, then becomes the center of attention when the mugger comes attacks.

The brief was to create a one shot film that is no longer then two minutes. As I've added credits at the beginning, I've gone o the two minute marker.
Conclusion; Cut down the credits at the beginning and shorten the dialog as this drags on for two long.

The dialog at the moment doesn't flow very well as it was very improvised and wasn't that funny. There were too many unnecessary swear words that had no relevance to the plot that were mainly there to cover up pauses.
Conclusion; Using the footage recorded, put together a script that cuts down the length of the conversation and has more comedy. Maybe introduce some conversation about old people?

The main focus in-front of the car, before the old woman arrives, is the parked car, as if it was important to the screenplay.
Conclusion; When filming make sure that the area in-front is clear or has relevance to the story.

The windscreen is dirty.
Conclusion; Clean it.

Within the main dialog between the two main characters, one is more prominent than the other, as the character on the right moves into the view of the camera more often.
Conclusion; They both need to move into the camera's view equally as much so that the audience can pick up on the personalities. Maybe introduce some coffee with the cakes to encourage more hand movements?